Updated script

1.        EXT. Dark street

Murderer is following JOHNNY discreetly down the street without him knowing. The murderer puts some leather gloves on to indicate he is going to kill JOHNNY. JOHNNY becomes visible and as the murderer becomes closer he pulls out a gun and shoots JOHNNY.

JOHNNY

(Groans)

JOHNNY begins staggering but collapses to the floor where he pulls out a gun. The murderer shoots him again this time killing him. The murderer walks off.

2.        INT. Detectives office

Fade into smoke from NANCY’s cigarette. NANCY is sat smoking. The smoke fades when NANCY begins to speak.

NANCY

There’s only one reason why I’m here and that’s to find JOHNNY’s killer

DETECTIVE stands up and looks directly at NANCY

DETECTIVE

Well that’s what I’m here for, but are you willing to do something for me

NANCY

I’ll do what’s needed…

DETECTIVE looks serious.

DETECTIVE

Even if it means taking down the gang?

NANCY

I said whatever you need, I don’t give a damn what happens to them anymore

NANCY and the DETECTIVE go silent for a second.

DETECTIVE

Well you gotta remember you’ll be working for me now

NANCY looks at the DETECTIVE in an unsure manner

NANCY

Ok what do I need to do?

DETECTIVE

Good. Well what I need from you, is to get the gang to trust you with anything. They already know you were with JOHNNY and being their leader there’s no doubt they’re trying to look for the killer. Use that as an excuse to get close cos they won’t question you wanting to be involved with helping them. Tell them you have some suspicions that it was gang leader RON LEMANSKY.

NANCY lights another cigarette.

NANCY

RON LEMANSKY? They’ll kill him just on suspicion.

DETECTIVE

Don’t worry we’ve got it all planned. We need them to believe it was him so you can have time to get to know the gang.

NANCY

Ok fine I guess you know what you are doing, I’ll go meet up with JOHNNYS partner.

NANCY and the DETECTIVE shake hands and NANCY walks out.

3.        EXT. Street

NANCY walks to meet JOHNNY’s partner. They begin talking. NANCY begins narrating.

NANCY

I was so confused; I didn’t know who to trust anymore. I did what the DETECTIVE said, I drew suspicions onto RON LEMANSKY. I was being taken to the gangs club so I knew I had to stay calm when I saw them all.

 

I have changed the ending of the script, as originally I wanted Johnny's gang members in be in the short sequence however I thought I could establish my aim better if we didn't know how the gang reacted to Nancy showing up.